Can't Get It Right
  

I’ve seen it all, broken mirrors, slamming doors

Homeless men fightin’ stupid wars

Highest wall meets hard cold ground

Blue-black waters…the sky coming down

 

Oh, I just can’t get it right

You better listen to what I’m sayin’

It’s not a card I’m playin’

I can’t change, don’t even think about it

It’s always the same, no use doubtin’ it!

(I just can’t get it right, no, I just can’t get it right)

 

My only friend lives in a lonely grave

I rode the rails off in space

Bought a one way ticket for a dead end street

Drunk from an empty bottle, ain’t life a tease?

 

Oh, I just can’t get it right

You better listen to what I’m sayin’

It’s not a card I’m playin’

I can’t change, don’t even think about it!

It’s always the same, don’t you doubt it!

(I just can’t get it right, no, I just can’t get it right)

 

I should have looser stamped across my head

Or a sign that says, you’d be better of dead

I’m just who I am and its not going to work

Pick somebody else, how about that jerk?

 

 

Oh, I just can’t get it right

You better listen to what I’m sayin’

It’s not a card I’m playin’

I can’t change, don’t even think about it!

It’s always the same, don’t you doubt it!

(I just can’t get it right, no, I just can’t get it right)

 


Comments:
 
OneVoice   OneVoice wrote
on 10/7/2008 11:48:00 AM
Victoria it's no crime to express your pain - it's therapeutic. "Just can't get it right"... "Just can't get it right". There will be times we are not going to be able to 'get it right'- you know this. I suspect during these times, we are not supposed to - on our own. During such moments we may become angry with God. Things out of our control often lead to pathways for anger, ones filled with rage, hurtful, self destructive behavior..., and the only thing we have left is the emptiness and the ache... so we continue 'replaying the 'DVD' and the pain and ache just play over and over and over and over again - that's all we have left...; but it does not fill the emptiness or give us understanding or peace - does it. Hey... if all we have is the ache to fill the emptiness to replace the love we've lost - hold on to the ache... who am I to know what is best for you. I pray you find peace. This reads like a sad song... You are not alone

stet   stet wrote
on 7/23/2008 2:16:19 PM
This is amazing, when i was reading it i wasn't reading it like a song but more of like those people you see up on stage just doing the spoken word, it rolls off the tongue and flows with great melody. I can totally picture a def poet going up on stage and doing this piece. I love it!

vwhitlock   vwhitlock wrote
on 7/14/2008 7:15:44 PM
Star Poet & Penname thanks for reading. Yeah, hooking up with a guy like this is a sure road to disaster but everybody has to do it at least once, I think? LOL I'm not sure about the tune either - probably because I can't carry one. LOL It is sort of painful but you have to laugh at a guy that can see his own faults and admit them and that's the point of the song. I really appreciate your feedback and one of these days, I'm going to write something really light and delirously happy but that's when you need to worry because it could mean some really good drugs - just kidding.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 7/14/2008 2:38:38 AM
Very good. I liked that you were still able to write a song like this even though it's painful. That shows bravery. And anyone that causes pain in this way deserves to be called a jerk...and more!

penname   penname wrote
on 7/13/2008 3:26:25 PM
oh i love this. when i read/and horribly sung it, i found my self singing it in a country tune. perhaps it's the profile photo that inspired me or better yet these awesome lyrics. the refrain is amazing. i had to read it twice to get the meaning. and by the last stanza I got it right! and you certainly command the listener to "listen to what this songwriter is sayin" great write... you did get this right and it is true to the emotion within this piece... it can be sung and felt no other way. and despite the depair in the song, it was uplifting- how can that be?!

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