Unfair Love
Love really is not fair,
At times love can really suck,
Why do we always compare?
Do I really need to be stuck?

Love is about sharing,
Hugging and holding,
With someone that is caring,
Bonding and molding.

Comments:
 
debby   debby wrote
on 4/30/2008 10:55:17 AM
Short and to the point. I liked it.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 4/30/2008 12:48:25 AM
Very good. Short and direct,but it says a lot. Nice!!!!

life_as_it_is   life_as_it_is wrote
on 4/29/2008 8:34:14 AM
Great quatrain rhyme scheme, and very true too! Get rid of all some comma's, replace two with question marks and put a space between the 4 and 5 line. Just a help for you to make it perfect. I rate your rhyme 100

mommys_angels0608   mommys_angels0608 wrote
on 4/28/2008 1:45:18 AM
Very true.

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