The Me I Once Knew

6-8-09 The Me I Once Knew

© 2009 Scottie Allman

The me I once knew,

No longer lives inside.

In  flash I was gone,

An empty shell was left behind,

As day by day I try my best

To escape the pain of a broken heart.

 

I see off in the distance,

Someone I want to become.

Someone I miss,

Who knew happiness;

A miniscule reflection,

Of who I was inside.

Is that far off person who I really was?

Or a new me I should strive to be?

 

As I move closer to the distant goal,

The me that I want to be,

Seems to step away.

Each time it makes me wonder,

Just what will it take,

For my life to come to me,

Instead of staying oh so distant.


Comments:
 
StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 7/17/2009 12:17:30 AM
I see this as a man with a broken heart who tries to get over it so he can concentrate on becoming a better person than he already is. This poem touches me for I felt the same and still feel it. We both know that there is a better person inside that we have to bring out. It all starts with "The Man In The Mirror" as Michael Jackson said.

Moonrose   Moonrose wrote
on 7/16/2009 9:06:40 PM
Maybe you shouldn't strive so much to be on the other side where the grass is greener; maybe you're casting too much of a shadow on where you are now to notice that it could be just as good, with a little care. Then again, I don't know anything but for what you've put here, so I could very well be wrong in my words. Having your heart broken is in my opinion the worst thing that can happen to anyone... I admire you, despite what you think of yourself, for even seeing a light and reaching towards it after going through something like that. Better yet, you're expressing yourself, opening up that same heart to others. That takes a lot, to me. And you did it quite well, I have to say. :)

Michele   Michele wrote
on 7/16/2009 5:10:10 PM
I know the feeling of 'better days' left behind--I'm sure all this will make you better or stronger.

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