I Try To Speak

I try to speak,

You turn away,

It bores right through my heart.

When will you hurt me more,

Than the love I have for you?

 


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tigercatracing   tigercatracing wrote
on 7/29/2009 4:31:56 AM
Yeah I think I got this and I think I like it the way it is because I think I understood it right away actually...

slallman2002   slallman2002 wrote
on 7/28/2009 11:35:05 AM
the turning away was yet another instance where she inflicted pain on me. I was asking when the pain that she inflicts will outweigh the amount of love that I have for her.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 7/28/2009 2:25:16 AM
I have seen and felt this same thing with my ex wife. Communication was not her strong point and it led to our divorce. Also, the last 2 lines threw me off the poem. Maybe "Though you try to hurt me more. . .My love for you goes deeper than the pain". Or something to that effect.

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