If you saw me now
If you saw me now what would you say
And I hope you can still make it through the day
If you saw me now would you turn the other way
And Im sorry that ive hurt you, Sorry i couldnt stay....

If I saw you now Id fall to my knees
And I hate being broken and lonely
If i saw you now id have to turn and run
And I cant face the shadows of everything that ive done....

If you wasted your time, Im glad you wasted it on me
And you should know that you have set me free
If I wasted your time, well Im sorry I let you go
And I cant stand the reflection, not even my own....

If you saw me now what would you do
And Im sorry for this hell your going through
If you saw me now would your heart still beat
And tell me, would you cry as you watched me leave....

If I saw you now, I wouldnt handle the pain
And I want you to know that im sorry again
If I saw you now my heart would skip a beat
An I want you to know that youve made me believe....

So many beautiful people and Ive met only one
And this one beautiful person will always call my heart home
So as I walk away I dont want to hear cry
And even though im not here, you will always be inside.....

By: Steven Cooke

Comments:
 
scooke2093   scooke2093 wrote
on 8/23/2010 9:15:39 PM
Thanks alot, I wrote this after just going through a break up lol, but I appreciate you comment. and I also appreciate the advise. Makes us all better writers I guess =)

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 8/17/2010 3:50:16 AM
I like the emotion you use in this poem for I can tell it came from the deepest part of the heart. Some minor suggestions: Maybe replace the word "wouldn't" with "couldn't" in the line "If I saw you now, I wouldnt handle the pain" for couldn't seem to express your pain more. And the last line. . . Maybe this would work. "Even though I'm not WITH YOU or THERE WITH YOU, you will always be inside ME or INSIDE MY HEART". Hope this helps to make a good poem better.

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