Forever
When the air falls from my lungs 
Tomorrow
I will remember you, and all your
Sorrow
I am the one who lives my life in
Regret
You are the one that I always
Forget
Tomorrow never seems to come
Within
A day of our love is like our first
Kiss
And when I look into your hearts
Content
I see how your mind is so very
Bent
When you said that you loved
Me
I believed it because I couldnt
See
But now that we have grown
Together
I know that you meant
never
What you intended to be
True
But babie I will always love you
<3

Comments:
 
scooke2093   scooke2093 wrote
on 5/2/2009 12:23:29 PM
Thank you, Im planning on writing a book as well of all poetry, I just need to figure out how to get it started lol

scooke2093   scooke2093 wrote
on 4/16/2009 7:21:53 AM
Thanks alot guys, I wrote this poem yesterday and made this rhyme scheme, I thought of the idea of one word lines, I was insecure about putting this on here at first, I wasnt sure what my readers would think of it, So I go curious and put it on here, Thanks for the feedback and I sure will take your advice and hopefully be creating another poem such as this one soon.

penname   penname wrote
on 4/16/2009 5:07:27 AM
this poem is quite meaningful. regardless of the rhyme scheme...its the long lines paired with the one word lines that is distracting and forces flow. though i love the title and the content of this splendid poem

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 4/16/2009 4:06:00 AM
Interesting words and style. This is someting that is totally new to me. But I think if you made all the one word lines ryhme, then it would make the flow smoother. Still, not bad.

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