Castles in the Sky
The castle crumbles
Once beautiful and strong
Now, ugly and weak
Beauty had been its weakness
Strength, a hindrance to its beauty
Both with and without
It crumbles
It is great, it is grand
It has no foundation
On which to stand


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StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 3/16/2009 1:43:34 PM
I like this for it has a simple truth that is universal. If anything you build has no foundation, it will fall,without a doubt. Whether it be a building or a person. Good job!

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