"Letting Go"
My gaze more lethal than a heavy dose of strychnine
pierces through your soulish realm,
exposing the tiny fractures that your well tailored suit so meticulously hide.
In my naivety, I almost missed it,
but time in my Father's presence has helped to sharpen my senses.
I'm no longer deaf nor am I blind.
So, when I look at you, I see the diamond cuff links and designer Gator shoes as metal hand cuffs and prison issued flip-flops.  I see straight through your cocky smile and smooth swagger into a heart full of fear and greed.  And now I recognize that the warmth I once felt in your embrace was a by-product of the strangle hold you had on my heart.
Despite what I see, I'm torn.  While my body wants to love you, the other two-thirds of me scream in anguish. So, I sit quietly and close my eyes to dull my natural sense of sight.  Suddenly, with my inner ear, I clearly hear these words resonating in my spirit...LET HIM GO!
So I exhale and follow that trusted voice.

penname   penname wrote
on 3/21/2009 5:40:52 PM
i agree with star p. i think in many areas of life, the universe even...the truth is always there...its just when we choose to see it or pretend we dont

penname   penname wrote
on 3/21/2009 5:39:57 PM
a style, without sarcasm, but true realism shines through here. I do agree the conflict with the movie and book/waiting to exhale... your poem here deserves a unique title. those final lines bring this full circle. this is fantastic.

BlueIris   BlueIris wrote
on 3/18/2009 2:06:50 AM
This is powerful writing. One thing--wasn't there a movie called "Waiting to Exhale"? I don't think I saw it... The name sounded familiar.

Trenchtownrock   Trenchtownrock wrote
on 3/16/2009 6:47:39 PM
I love how the voice in this piece came to the realization what is good and what isn't.. this is so strong and open.. well written piece.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 3/16/2009 1:25:12 PM
Another good one for I liked its honesty. To finally see the truth in a person like this and to make the hard decision to let him go. The heart may hurt but the spirit knows what is best. You get a "10" from me on this one!

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