Silver Shark - reposting (jaws theme music)

He tormented my lips with his.

His tongue a weapon.

Invading my utmost private parts.

No space untouched.

He left me laying there by the pool.

A terry cloth towel couldn’t dry me.

My swimsuit clung to me

moist from the neverending

Flow that oozed down

My leg.

It glistened in the sun though I kept my legs

Pressed tight together to make the

Throbbing subside.

My heart was still pounding in my chest

As my chest heaved in and out.

I couldn’t stand it anymore.

I didn’t say a word.

I just looked over at him.

Such a sweet smile with his reddened cheeks.

I smirked and held my arms open wide.

Twas his cue…

He walked over to me

And rolled my suit down

As if peeling a soft grape. Taking me

Entirely in, his eyes.

He peeled the pink striped suit down

Over my curves.

Down to my feet that he touched

Carefully.

I stepped my legs out of the bathingsuit

And stood there

Naked.

With the shimmer of the pool dancing shadows

on me.

Then,

He pushed me in.

Flopping backwards in the pool.

A surge of air and water ran through me.

My hair stuck to my ears and my eyes

Pinched with water droplets.

I gasped.

And he jumped in after.

With my  look of disdain…

He came towards me

With his trunks down

And a swollen expression.

Silently,
he grabbed me in his arms
and felt the water
Vibrate around our bodies.

That afternoon I felt

Most loved.

Even when I caught

Glimpse of

The shiny silver shark.

It exposed its teeth

within my darling’s smile.

Rearing them didnt
frighten me.
Perhaps I was naive.

It was all over by nightfall.

He simply walked away

Wiping the evidence

From the silver knife

With his swim trunks

That lay by the pool.

I lay there floating in the water

With only swirls of blood

To comfort me.

 

 


Comments:
 
penname   penname wrote
on 12/2/2008 5:56:28 AM
that was not the intent. i must work again on this piece of writing then.

ClydeFisk   ClydeFisk wrote
on 11/22/2008 1:57:17 AM
so. ummmm...this was, what ? your batmishpa? guy sounds like an egotistical jerk anyway . you're way better off without him. him and his big shiny silver parts.........um still got his number? lol. erotically disturbing.....or is it disturbingly erotic? i always get my adjectives mixed up when i'm in a state of arousal. so koooooool.

Warriorprincess55   Warriorprincess55 wrote
on 11/21/2008 10:21:20 PM
Pen, poets write from what is within the heart period! This poem is excellent-period! There is no need to correct the 'gratuitious lines, or the sounds or even the image settings'! It is perfect as it is and those of us-like yourself, who are true writers of poetry, understand what this poem conveys! As I've always said about you and your work- you are awesome and it is a pure joy to read works that are as meaningful as yours! You go girl!

penname   penname wrote
on 7/7/2008 5:13:43 PM
ok, i just noticed I spelled holes wrong. [me-terrible speller]

penname   penname wrote
on 7/7/2008 5:13:09 PM
rereading this...there are some major wholes in this "plot" also, i realize there are too many gratuitious lines and also no sounds or image setting. It is lacking, I will have to rework this and I can't decide if it is to be a story or a poem... Also, I was pointed out that the "redemption" quality is missing and it leaves the ending pretty...well flat.

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erotic thriller short/poem/story just stretching my limits on writing. tell me what you think. its okay if it sucks. i havent decided if its a poem yet or a story- very underdeveloped and experimental.
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just stretching my limits on writing. tell me what you think. its okay if it sucks. i havent decided if its a poem yet or a story- very underdeveloped and experimental.
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