Silver Shark - reposting (jaws theme music)

He tormented my lips with his.

His tongue a weapon.

Invading my utmost private parts.

No space untouched.

He left me laying there by the pool.

A terry cloth towel couldn’t dry me.

My swimsuit clung to me

moist from the neverending

Flow that oozed down

My leg.

It glistened in the sun though I kept my legs

Pressed tight together to make the

Throbbing subside.

My heart was still pounding in my chest

As my chest heaved in and out.

I couldn’t stand it anymore.

I didn’t say a word.

I just looked over at him.

Such a sweet smile with his reddened cheeks.

I smirked and held my arms open wide.

Twas his cue…

He walked over to me

And rolled my suit down

As if peeling a soft grape. Taking me

Entirely in, his eyes.

He peeled the pink striped suit down

Over my curves.

Down to my feet that he touched


I stepped my legs out of the bathingsuit

And stood there


With the shimmer of the pool dancing shadows

on me.


He pushed me in.

Flopping backwards in the pool.

A surge of air and water ran through me.

My hair stuck to my ears and my eyes

Pinched with water droplets.

I gasped.

And he jumped in after.

With my  look of disdain…

He came towards me

With his trunks down

And a swollen expression.

he grabbed me in his arms
and felt the water
Vibrate around our bodies.

That afternoon I felt

Most loved.

Even when I caught

Glimpse of

The shiny silver shark.

It exposed its teeth

within my darling’s smile.

Rearing them didnt
frighten me.
Perhaps I was naive.

It was all over by nightfall.

He simply walked away

Wiping the evidence

From the silver knife

With his swim trunks

That lay by the pool.

I lay there floating in the water

With only swirls of blood

To comfort me.



penname   penname wrote
on 12/2/2008 5:56:28 AM
that was not the intent. i must work again on this piece of writing then.

ClydeFisk   ClydeFisk wrote
on 11/22/2008 1:57:17 AM
so. ummmm...this was, what ? your batmishpa? guy sounds like an egotistical jerk anyway . you're way better off without him. him and his big shiny silver still got his number? lol. erotically disturbing.....or is it disturbingly erotic? i always get my adjectives mixed up when i'm in a state of arousal. so koooooool.

Warriorprincess55   Warriorprincess55 wrote
on 11/21/2008 10:21:20 PM
Pen, poets write from what is within the heart period! This poem is excellent-period! There is no need to correct the 'gratuitious lines, or the sounds or even the image settings'! It is perfect as it is and those of us-like yourself, who are true writers of poetry, understand what this poem conveys! As I've always said about you and your work- you are awesome and it is a pure joy to read works that are as meaningful as yours! You go girl!

penname   penname wrote
on 7/7/2008 5:13:43 PM
ok, i just noticed I spelled holes wrong. [me-terrible speller]

penname   penname wrote
on 7/7/2008 5:13:09 PM
rereading this...there are some major wholes in this "plot" also, i realize there are too many gratuitious lines and also no sounds or image setting. It is lacking, I will have to rework this and I can't decide if it is to be a story or a poem... Also, I was pointed out that the "redemption" quality is missing and it leaves the ending pretty...well flat.

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just stretching my limits on writing. tell me what you think. its okay if it sucks. i havent decided if its a poem yet or a story- very underdeveloped and experimental.