Love on the beach

I  sense the tingle of your fingers
On the shadowy curve of my back
Through their after-fragrance.
You ran your fingers on my belly
I could almost hear their music.
I could hear your carbon smell
As the sun burnt your crackling back
And we lay, on the beach, oblivious
Of the crustaceans crawling on us.


Comments:
 
nisheedhi   nisheedhi wrote
on 12/12/2008 8:46:59 PM
Thanks,girl_disappearing and Trenchtownrock for your comments

girl_disappearing   girl_disappearing wrote
on 12/12/2008 8:34:55 PM
i like the imagery of this poem. the couple laying on the beach, touching, the crustaceans. good imaginative & unique write.

Trenchtownrock   Trenchtownrock wrote
on 12/11/2008 10:39:01 AM
LOL..lol..that was good. I wasn't expecting crabs and lobsters to break the mood, but they can be a mood killer. Good work!

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Poetry based upon actual experiences, not one thought up in the intellectual aridness of a pseudo-thinker. Words as they mean in the specific context of recollected thought or image , not meaning several things at a time but that which re-creates an aura or a haze of an earlier experience.
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