Naked


For you I strip bare
I stand here without any care
So ask away if you dare
For here I am, naked

Ask what you will
And say what you feel
And to you I will reveal
What’s always laid still
And hidden within

To you I will confess
What has become a mess
My secrets within
They will no longer rest

So for you I strip bare
I stand here without any care
So ask away if you dare
For him I am
Naked.


Comments:
 
OneVoice   OneVoice wrote
on 9/26/2008 9:10:11 AM
It is a good thing for a woman to 'feel' comfortable and be completely open to love... a love that gives her ease and comfort... one that inspires her to express her repressed emotions

  wrote
on 9/20/2008 11:39:08 PM
Very good. I like the premise and the flow.

Moqui_Takoda   Moqui_Takoda wrote
on 9/20/2008 12:29:40 PM
nicely maintained rhyme scheme with the words 'will' (twice) and 'within' (once) giving it a nice, elegant touch ... this poem of honesty and offering yourself, your needs, your thoughts ... it has a religious overtone or not, depending upon how it is read at the penultimate line with 'him' ... i like this, it is good

Rach   Rach wrote
on 9/20/2008 4:03:33 AM
lovely simple but powerful seems to portray a mixture of strength and vulnerabilty

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