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slowly getting the hang of this...lol

breeze tickles the leaves
quick movements of light and shade
listen, hear them dance

fern frond unfurling
fingers beckon to the light
a time of rebirth

bright trickling fountain
koi swimming their zigzag path
waterlilies bloom

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		kiwigirl wrote on 8/19/2009 8:57:00 AM
		Thank you papak. You know I always value your opinion, humble or otherwise. I agree, those 3 words can be hard to get out but it gets easier the more often you say them. Other than that, these work as haiku should? I will take my lead on this and all else from you.

		Papak wrote on 8/18/2009 11:34:28 PM
		In my humble opinion haiku should work both ways, by that I mean the first and third line can be reversed without changing the context of the haiku. All three of these can do that. Everyone agree? Disagree? "fern frond unfurling" I must admit I got a bit tongue tied on the f's

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