musings


i'm new at this poetic game
just beginning, always learning
soaking in the words of others
much more capable than me
working out the syntax
sorting concepts into written form
finding where one stanza ends
and another begins

it's not as easy as it looks
this collecting of random words
placing one after another
and on failing, doing it all again
attempting to place on paper
a coherent set of thoughts
and in the simplest possible manner
tell a story in a verse

first introduce a subject
then place it in a field
plant flowers all around it
a listless river ambling through
pay homage to the wildlife
and the respect due to the trees
view the creation of a higher power
deftly threaded in a line or two









Comments:
 
kiwigirl   kiwigirl wrote
on 9/2/2009 1:25:17 AM
Thank you...it does read better that way

Papak   Papak wrote
on 9/2/2009 12:41:47 AM
The only suggestion I have on this selection is in the first stanza the last two lines. I wonder if you would consider "finding where one stanza ends and another begins" I only suggest this because of the natural sequence.

djc   djc wrote
on 9/1/2009 10:50:48 AM
Wow!!! I like this poem..sort of a how to about poetry...thanks for you comment on my "Suspended Self" poem.

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