getting a handle on haiku

whale shark hunts alone
calming is the sea at night
little fish beware

sun strikes misty dawn
bands of colours arc the sky
arise aurora







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Jan   Jan wrote
on 8/20/2009 7:20:58 AM
i don't have much knowledge in haiku..but yours is really good..i like how you connected the two verses and i can picture the sea and everything else.. :)

Starlingpoet   Starlingpoet wrote
on 8/20/2009 4:13:20 AM
There is nothing wrong with your haiku at all. I especially like the second one. It says Sunshine and/or Rainbow in a very spectacular way!! I am the farthest person away from knowing anything about haiku but the most important part is the count which you have perfect, the rest will just come from those words that you said are coming and won't stop! I'm glad that you like the S.P.S. book it is always nice to know that someone out there is enjoying it. We will be having our new 2008-2009 book out soon.

kiwigirl   kiwigirl wrote
on 8/20/2009 2:43:48 AM
I did as you suggested...and yes, her haiku is lovely, especially the one to do with shoes and puddles. Is that the one you are referring to? I see she is a member of SPS and is featured in a book put out for them 2006-2007. I have a copy in my bottom drawer. All sorts of treasures to be found in that drawer. I guess one has to reside there to get work published in their books. Would they accept contributions by proxy do ya think? ;-) I'm still learning all this, but think I've come a long way in a very short time. I really hadn't attempted to write anything for almost 10 years, and now I cannot stop the words. The inscription inside the jacket of that same book reads "I hope that some day you will take again take up the pen and write". I have done so. Is it worthy of ever being put in print?

Papak   Papak wrote
on 8/19/2009 11:28:01 PM
I think ya got it! Flip through until you find some haiku by StarlingPoet there is a very good one there

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