Secrets of Clarity

Secrets of Clarity

 

Chapter One

The Clarity Church Community

 

            Sacrificial time, our time to purge. The devious secrets of the celestial body peaking through the puffy gray clouds that scattered the night sky. Obedient, strong hands held the frighten, yet willing chosen member beneath the frigid waters. The sickly sweet aroma of roasted human flesh permeates the air as we celebrate our offering. Rhythm tic sounds of violins and drums filled the night. Our feast had just yet begun. The stomp and pound of our feet reaching the worn ground as one, as we danced and chanted all for him, all for you; our lord, our savoir.

            As the night whined down to a halt Christian, the young man who guides us closer to your arms began his speech.

 


Comments:
 
SapphireCat   SapphireCat wrote
on 2/3/2009 11:09:46 AM
Personally, I would try to vary your sentence structure a little more, but the plot sounds intriguing. I'm excited to see where you take this.

jordii777
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Mystery
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Synopsis
A young girls caught up in the beliefs of her cult uncovers a secret that could expose the group for who they really are.
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This is just the 1st couple of sentences, however I wanted to see if it sounded good, so please ell me what you think of it.
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