A sorrow farwell
  Its so dark.
Why is it so dark?
I hate this place.
Can someone please save me?
There's no way out.
I m trapped.
HELP ME!
SAVE ME!

Save me from the end.
Save me from my enemy.
Save my from myself.

Its so dark
But at least now I know why.
You've been dragging me down for to long.
LET GO OF ME!
Please let go!

Its so dark.
And I m alone.
WAIT!
NO COMEBACK!

Its not to late.
You can still be saved.

Its so dark.
and I m alone.
I thought thats what I wanted.
To be let go of.
To be on my own,
By myself.
I really just wanted to be saved.
But now its to late.
Your gone,
and I m still trapped,
still alone.

Its so dark.
Can't you please just comeback to me?
COMEBACK!
PLEASE COMEBACK!
Please!

I need you .
I want you.
I miss you.
I m sorry.

But please..
COMEBACK!
I can't be alone anymore.
I was wrong.
I M SORRY!
I m so so sorry.

Comments:
 
unicorn2008   unicorn2008 wrote
on 4/28/2008 6:45:50 PM
That was really good.It was very unique.Sounded great.

Ancient117331   Ancient117331 wrote
on 4/21/2008 2:16:24 PM
jordii, A very powerful write - just as it stands. Chris T.

lindsay   lindsay wrote
on 4/19/2008 12:18:44 AM
This is very well done. I can hear the desperation growing with each stanza. I like that you bolded certain words--it was a creative choice.

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