Smoke in the Showers
smoke In the showers 
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what are you doing
contemplating 
on the weeping tiles
are they whispering
amidst the steam 
getting in your eyes
droplets gibbering
mitigating 
the panic’s disguise
the nozzle’s bleeding
and spiraling 
faces locked in smiles

inhale. expire

plain and convincing
like naked skin
bathed and then baptized
the cancer within
masticating
a faith falsified
angels are coughing
fingers slipping
as cold walls denied
your hands the soothing
touch of a dream
that may have sufficed

inhale; expire

let the smoke mingle with the water
it’s the disease licking you inside
your plague can’t be cured in the showers
a child in the mirror crucified

it’s all white with nowhere to hold
kneel for respite, worship the mold 

inhale; expire

memories griming
remembering
and never excised
demons reflecting
convoluting
what’s realized
delusions flowing
hemorrhaging 
and washing your mind
cumbersome breathing
filter damping 
returning in kind 

the filth underneath your skin 
emaciating your being

purged with ashes
taste the sickness
inhale

expire.


Comments:
 
Michele   Michele wrote
on 8/18/2009 9:58:58 PM
Very powerful emotion--the last 'inhale....expire' takes on new meaning--earlier in the poem they had a more 'medical' connotation(exhalation referred to as 'expiration' in a medical setting)--which was appropriate as well! As an emphysemic, & daughter of a lung cancer casualty I didn't have to read this one twice!

Jan   Jan wrote
on 8/18/2009 11:24:52 AM
wow..really good write here..vivid descriptions with a nice flow of words..

Trenchtownrock   Trenchtownrock wrote
on 8/18/2009 11:16:12 AM
Love this piece..love the inhale, expire lines..this flows very well and you painted the poem very well..good work.

MorlockKeeper   MorlockKeeper wrote
on 8/18/2009 5:05:14 AM
Nice beat & imagery :)

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