The Smiting
Sometimes the fables of our youth
that mothers oft repeat
still come to mind in adult lives
to punish our deceit.

"May lightning strike me as I stand,"
is said to cover lies,
beware, the smiting might occur
before you can revise.

A bolt descends from black of storm,
enforcing breach of trust,
we rarely know the smitten ones,
unless, alas, it's us.


Poem and Photo- Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber-
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Comments:
 
WAN   WAN wrote
on 6/19/2009 9:27:57 PM
a lesson is still a lesson, its cycling like the water and life, great poem. I have to tell this to my mother:)

Michele   Michele wrote
on 6/19/2009 7:48:56 PM
Made me chuckle! Enjoyed the archaic phrasing too--

Moonrose   Moonrose wrote
on 6/19/2009 12:14:29 PM
I really like this; short and concise, flowing nicely the whole time. I especially love that last stanza. Good job! :))

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