The City on an Inland Sea
Its downtown skyline on display,
this city on an inland sea,
it draws the ruralites away
from lonely roads and storms' debris.

This city on an inland sea,
with much to teach and lots to learn
from lonely roads and storms' debris,
it asks so little in return.

With much to teach and lots to learn,
the Chi-town's heart is open wide,
it asks so little in return
from those who share its civic pride.

The Chi-town's heart is open wide,
it draws the ruralites away
to those who share its civic pride-
its downtown skyline on display.


Poem and Photo- Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber-
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StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 8/5/2009 1:14:02 AM
You did the city a great write with your tribute here. This reminded me of my trip to Hong Kong when I went to the H.K. harbor and seen the skyline of the city. Thanks for the memories!

huberjack   huberjack wrote
on 8/4/2009 7:30:46 PM
Thanks, Michele, that is what makes a pantoum so intriguing, and so difficult... I'm glad you enjoyed it. Jack

Michele   Michele wrote
on 8/4/2009 7:24:33 PM
Juxtaposition of repeated lines is very good for keeping the attention--also the mystery of which city you're describing!

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