Inexorable Want

Inexorable Want

 

How do I find

These sentences

Written as they are

In ephemeral ink

Indelible lines

Inscribed in my being

 

Spectral yearnings

 

It crashes me

To rocks

In unanswerable waves

Swimming tidal

To the inexorable

Yet

The implacable distance

Confounds me

 

Longing vent me no more

In twists and turns

And unmade beds

Where crumpled kisses

Dream on hot soaked cushions

Leave me not

To the ever restless

Fumblings

Quiet unheard of whisperings

Of her name

 

How do I find

The collective alphabetic

Of love unknown

Yet

Divulged by these

The screeching banshees

Of petal falling

Corpuscle red

They flow through my blood

Unbidden

Unwarranted

Unwanted

And so desperate

 

How do they find me

On such a precarious brink

With the voltage

And permission of electricity

Rapine in all my singularity

Hurricane she batters at me

For all my will to resist

I am

Weak

 

I cannot

 

Help me please

Lest I drown dark

Brooding in forever’s need

She is my quiet

And ever sun set calmed

Sea

And I

I am a tempest

Left to bellow and blow

Inside an hour glass

In the confines of my soul

 

Help me please

Save me from this void ripping

As she shreds every day

Every hour

With my unrequited returning

To her arms

 

Save me

 

For I have found

My life

My soul companion

So far from me

On some so strange a horizon

That the distance

Between us

Could prove to be

My

Undoing

 

 

 


Comments:
 
frederic   frederic wrote
on 5/20/2009 8:19:40 PM
"She batters at me" is followed by a glaring contradiction of "She is my quiet." Also, you are "bellowing" and "blowing" at her, and yet you suggest that you are not reciprocating something to her with "unrequited returning." That is too much contradiction. Once again, you're confusing the reader with those juxtapositions. You have to keep the flow of meaning clear--as grandiloquent as you like, but clear. Otherwise the tone of imploring is profound and adept. The speaker doesn't really see hope for bridging the gap.

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