spring cleaning
tethered by the tendons that restrain its escape.

conduits are channelled to revive its being.

exposed upon the table, the operation

makes the dust ascend, lifts the veil on the bride.

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Stephen M   Stephen M wrote
on 4/23/2009 5:31:33 PM
frederic, I appreciate your attention to detail, but you're taking it in the wrong direction. This is not about getting married or finding and readying bride, at least not in a literal sense. The title in and of itself is a metaphor of the correct context, which is more cyptic than your assumption. It's not the only way the poem can go, I should know, I wrote it. Thanks though! Your poetic knowledge is always enlightening.

frederic   frederic wrote
on 4/22/2009 1:32:02 PM
I can accept the harsh imagery surrounding the readying of the bride, which is the only way the poem can go. Getting married, I guess, can prove an ordeal, right? But, you have the mistake of eliciting the wrong context in the title, "spring cleaning." A person cleaning does not find a bride. Needs improvement.

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