what is the color of a broken heart?


an unavailable heart
angry at the universe
escapes the bitter delusion 
moves on without end

a heart near the ocean
is torn and abandoned
pieces here and there

a heart in the prairies
fades into the pain
fails to return to sweeter times
the midnight sky sleeps 

a heart that loved too much
is confined to a cage
stars continue to fall

a heart unreachable
heavenly and eternal
a few moments spent
is worth more than forever


©Jaydean Wszolek  2011

Comments:
 
Conflicteddreamer   Conflicteddreamer wrote
on 8/28/2012 8:36:21 PM
I liked your poem very much. I also like images of the city where you're from.

Allan_Marsden   Allan_Marsden wrote
on 8/26/2012 2:00:49 AM
Nice poem, interesting ideas. Some comments: Stanza 2 (which I really like) would work better for me as: a heart near the ocean/is torn/abandoned pieces here and there Stanza 3 line 2 I read initially as 'fades into the plain' which almost makes more sense than 'pain'. Typo 1st stanza: delusion, not dellusion.

whenwinwhen   whenwinwhen wrote
on 9/2/2011 6:53:42 AM
i like this poem...i love the midnight sky sleeps

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