Dark Night of The Soul
Sun that sets and stumps my will,
See her face and my dreams kill,
World that lives only until,
Another dream that makes it fill.

Shallow breath I can relate,
She's out there somewhere, I'm Irate,
So connected no debate,
Kidnapped my love and fueled my hate.

Murder marches one by one,
No reservation I'm undone,
Won't hold me back though I am shunned,
I'll tear right through to grasp at love.

Bit by bit I am depressed,
Hopeless now I won't digress,
Hold it back under this stress,
They justify with such finesse.

I guess for now it eats me whole,
Little light to watch unfold,
Clouds they darken without control,
Another dark night of the soul.


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Michele   Michele wrote
on 4/22/2009 8:43:24 PM
Those nights are long, too! After having lived with my brother's drug and alcohol ravages until he died last year, my mother's cancer which she fought so hard for 5 years, and my emphysema the last 12 years, I've had many of those. Before I got the computer, I'd just scribble in my journal until I could get to sleep. I now have some decent breathing medicine and sleep through the night. Thank God for the gift of self-expression. Not only a great analgesic, but is a way to share and accomplish something that can help others, and lasts. Saved my sanity more than once!

shakatoah   shakatoah wrote
on 11/6/2008 6:47:25 AM
Sojourner...sometimes I just look at the sky and say, 'God...what were you thinking!' Except I know that it's not God or some force in the universe...it is humankind that allows these injustices to grow and multiply. My heart is with you. I feel you'll one day find your daughter again...though I know that doesn't dim the pain of each day without her. I also love the way you crafted this work... rhyming verse, when done well, lends itself to deep emotion. You gave me goosebumps. God bless.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 11/6/2008 4:26:24 AM
I feel for you here. Your pain here is felt by so many in a situation you summarize. I do wish you the best with your daughter and I hope that one day you will see her again.

jlew1973   jlew1973 wrote
on 11/5/2008 8:41:25 PM
Beautiful, dark, tragic and real. Thanks for putting your pain out here for others to see. I relate, although in a totally different way. You captured the moment I'm sure many of us experience during great frustration and bitterness and loss. Besides you expressing yourself so well, I admire your conformity to the structure. The rhyming is true. The stanzas flow and it's cohesive. Many thanks again, John.

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Today I got Child Support request in the mail. If you know anything about me, you will find my first child was craftily and illegally adopted right under my nose when I was 17 years old. I miss her so much, and it hurts. So today when I got the notice I was like, "There is no way they are SOOO stupid," I was excited and everything, and I was thinking I will get to see my little girl. No such luck, the child support request was for a previous resident, and not for me. I immediately became depressed and wrote this.
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