Broken
Flower, blossom full,
Exude all that you are,
Fill my world with joy,
And time may heal the scars.

Fragrance fills my mind,
I look on you in hope,
Could you recompense?
Or are my longings broke?

Static deep inside,
We share another day,
Blood racing through my veins,
Not knowing what to say.

Your glamor branches out,
And others start to gaze,
Insecurity crashes in,
My resentment starts to rage.

I treasure you so much,
My heart can't stand to lose,
I know no other love,
So I settle for abuse.

Oh flower be so crushed,
Your love I cannot know,
Because to love you more correctly,
I would have to grow.

Comments:
 
penname   penname wrote
on 11/15/2008 3:55:36 PM
i really enjoyed this. the poem is lovely and the tone and feel is even. I'm truly impressed and love the meaning in this poem. I'm sure it can speak to many readers. i often use rhyme but fear it will get sing songy- this of course did not in your delightful poem. the rhythm and your style work so well in this. thanks for sharing it. the only line that rung flat for me was "oh flower be so crushed"- it's a great line...but couldve been more powerful or given more to the good ending if a line was used that didnt sound so trite/cliche/singsongy. Please take no offense...the poem was really great...I think it would be just slightly better with a better line. All the lines atop it increases the expectations at the end.

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