Winter Sun
He mourns past summers
blizzard blinded and grieving;
The sun comes too late.

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Roane242   Roane242 wrote
on 12/21/2008 1:53:43 PM
That's high praise. The ice cream on my profile is delicious.

Roane242   Roane242 wrote
on 12/20/2008 11:09:57 PM
Thanks for the comments. I'm ambivalent about this one. I agree that the first line is the strongest. I may rework it. And Coo, I haven't read Room 119, but I do love haiku. -Roane

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 12/20/2008 10:22:40 PM
Not bad. Like Trenchtown, I liked the first line. Also reminded me of summers past and the winters that folloewd them.

Trenchtownrock   Trenchtownrock wrote
on 12/20/2008 7:38:10 PM
Amazing Haiku! The first line is great. Loved this read.

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A haiku.
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