Barcelona

the crowds, the loud roars of hello as they pass
by each other, this impression will forever last
of a city as bright as light the beginning of day
a vitality that in my memory will always stay

will I return to this place I wanted to call my home?
or am I destined to be forever on my own
in a place where my dream is always around the corner
drifting further or closer? I feel it's getting warmer

the voices, the noises, the sounds of kids, not strife
in this vibrant place, where too-loud sounds are rife
like a picture painted suddenly it comes to life
the city is my partner, and I would be his wife.

R WILSON 2009

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Michele   Michele wrote
on 5/18/2009 2:52:27 PM
Thanks for taking me to a place I've always wanted to go---

Trenchtownrock   Trenchtownrock wrote
on 5/15/2009 2:16:11 PM
I saw the title to this piece and I had to read it.. I had such a bad experience in Barcelona...but I am glad you can paint it so well in this piece.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 5/14/2009 12:36:02 AM
I like this for you capture the beat of the city and you tell your thoughts about it. I would love to visit there one day and feel what you wrote here. (I see Bluez already been there!) A friendly suggestion: Maybe the last line can read " It let's me know I am alive" or somrthing to that effect. You have captured the pulse of the city and like Bluez said, you kinda lost it at the end. Maybe that small change will get it back. Still, another good poem!

Bluez   Bluez wrote
on 5/5/2009 7:41:25 PM
I liked this one, and chose to read this one first for two reasons, first, cause I have been to your city and had a great time, and will return one day soon! Secondly because there were no comments here yet...so... Good work, I think you lost it a little at the end, and not that I am any great writer but I do the same thing, and I gave it a ten.

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poem about Barcelona, Spain.
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