Surfacing

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Bluez   Bluez wrote
on 6/10/2009 10:45:23 PM
OK, I wasn't going to point that out, I wasn't sure if you had done that on purpose, but you are putting your work to the side, where the "background" of your writing goes, and not over to the left where it belongs. I like the writing though, dark and a little frightening, but I like it.

PyschedelicPatty   PyschedelicPatty wrote
on 6/8/2009 3:07:01 PM
i know and i dont know why it is in there! thanks for looking

PyschedelicPatty
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Synopsis
I swim just below the surface Not too far down Just far enough No one notices I hide here coming up for air When Whenever My lungs feel full and bursting The tide Comes and sweeps me away From the world In which I feel Alien Once I walked upon Earth in Sunlight It shone around me like a halo bright and brilliant Golden I could breathe free I could feel, touch, smell The world was azure Lavender tinted I fell down into an Abyss I was struck by Darkness The Darkness envelpoed me in its cloak of electric Black velvet I longed for the darkness and the embrace As I waited beneath a Blood red Moon I could again touch, smell, feel, the Darkness bruised my face Darkness When did I fall under your spell that I could not dispel As the Darkness faded The Water invited me soft and salty Like a Teardrop I swim here Just under the surface I need to I should come up for Air The Water is withering , withering me away away Away like a little boys lost kite Flown into the Sky Not gone , perhaps, Perhaps lost in transition I think the sky is falling There is no place to hide Unless the Water can protect me from its blow Maybe it can Maybe it can do this Go back to sleep Swimming so deep Against the Tide Which is no No Prince at all Yet it still takes my breath away
Published Date
9/14/2008 12:00:00 AM
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