Changes

Your fragrance went first
funny how it followed so quickly  

I closed the windows, pulled the shades
tried to get it to stay
to outlive the roses

The picture in the hallway
still hangs crooked
and the door has yet to be fixed. 

After-play should be allowed
erase a word
delete the moment
alter the ending


Comments:
 
frederic   frederic wrote
on 6/8/2009 8:33:55 PM
I like this poem better where you are a totally passive observer of the changes that have occurred. It seems more your psychological intention. So, I would re-write "I closed the windows, pulled the shades..." For example: "Now I do not open the windows/that you so preferred open/The shades have been pulled/forever." Very interesting.

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