A Gift For Ma

That's right little ole lady it's here
once again, your birthday is back so
 let your aches settle in. What to get you?,
something old or new?, you kissed my
cheek and said, "your love will do".
To get a gift, it's not just for you, when
 the one watching you open it get's
 excited too. So I started out for
something unique, and that's
what she got... to say the least

I went for a walk, and I  wandered
about, I kicked this old liquor bottle
 and a genie came out
As startled, shocked and as scared
as I was, this gift would be perfect
for the woman I love

So I scooped the genie and
the three wishes up, I ran all the
way home while shaking him up,
sitting the bottle on the kitchen
counter, I unscrewed the cap and
never smelt anything fouler

The bottle fell over and the
genie rolled out, he got back
to his feet when he then passed out.
So all I could do was laugh at the genie
 Now pitiful and drunk,  just needing
some sleepy

But now at this point there’s nothing I can
do, so I went to mama and said,
"pick a hand... one or two”

The drunken genie man is who she'd pick
 so I offered her the hand with the half full bottle,
and told her to wash him down quick with
this foul smelling WHISKEY SOUR


Comments:
 
StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 11/20/2009 2:55:20 AM
whimsically done yet it has that hard truth in it. And the way you told this was very different, yet refreshing.

penname   penname wrote
on 2/16/2009 7:11:23 PM
the more you write the better we all get

penname   penname wrote
on 2/16/2009 7:11:10 PM
ah yes, this seems perfected. publishable i'm sure. Wonderful! just wonderful. Great writers know the power of revision. Though the first was amazing. You just put the cherry on top for the reader to enjoy and savor it's raw sweetness. Beautiful writing. truly.

penname   penname wrote
on 2/16/2009 11:34:23 AM
this was amazingly and ironically fun. I love the liveliness in this-though underlying seriousness of it all. Yes, truly a delightful poem. they all feel so true to life and to form

Trenchtownrock   Trenchtownrock wrote
on 2/16/2009 7:08:54 AM
This is a wonderful write. Loved the flow and the story was exciting to read.

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