Where's Daddy?

First day of school, and daddy wasn't there

he wasn't at home, what made me even care

mama dropped me off, detecting my pain

grandma even made it, she walks with a cane

Daddy Where Were You?

to the streets you were true

Eighth grade graduation, another important day you miss

glad you didn't come, would have gave you my ass to kiss

had no fun with family that night, just a friend

smoked so much weed, like there was no end

cause each broken promiss, left me with a broken heart to mend

This emotional roller coaster, I took a riding

it expressed all the true feelings, I was hiding

High school graduation don't get no verse

had responsibilities that weren't mine, what a curse

Mama's boyfriend touching me like he does grown women

crying, fighting, screaming for you, as he burst my tight lemon

Daddy Where Were You? Why didn't you save me?

was taken to the doctor, now I'm having his baby

Mama didn't believe me so I had a silent abortion

you left a child that needed you, how do you sleep at night

don't you think of me, has to be a hard fight

Now as a woman, I'm no longer dreaming

of seeing us together, smile's brightly beaming

didn't give up on you yet, but I've protected my heart

I no longer feel warm inside, like a pop tart

You'll never be there, I've learned my lesson

breaking your last promiss, was a blessin

grew tired of asking the Where's Daddy question

Tiny   Tiny wrote
on 11/29/2008 3:42:15 PM
Real out there emotions in you poem. You have a lot in what your saying and I do agree with BlueIris, a poem does not have to rhyme but a little more editing could make it better.

BlueIris   BlueIris wrote
on 8/26/2008 10:49:46 PM
Good job portraying strong emotion in your poem. Your similie "like a pop tart" seemed oddly out of place. It's okay to do an imperfect rhyme. However, if you can't think of anything else to rhyme with heart, you could try saying, "protected myself." Then you could say something like, "I set you aside on a dusty shelf," or "I took you out of my heart, placed/set you on a shelf." Those were just quick ideas I had.

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Another writing from the heart. Something a lot of us can relate to.
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