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We met in an unusual place
The connection we shared was instant
We talked on a frequent basis,
sharing intimate deatils of our life's case

Our first day spending time,
was more like reuniting two old friends together
The first kiss sparked flames,
taking me off my feet, light like a feather

Time continued,
I thought I would be your one and only
Instaed,
I end up lonely

At night I lay awake, with thoughts  of you
wondering where we took a left turn
My body calls your name,
your not there
Now my heart heart pumps blue.

Finally realizing that we're through,
my heart turns cold no longer beaming
Life with out you,
 it has no meaning


Comments:
 
Tiny   Tiny wrote
on 11/29/2008 3:34:41 PM
I felt it and liked it, won't remind you of the mistakes.

MsPoeticJustice   MsPoeticJustice wrote
on 8/26/2008 8:43:54 PM
thanks for catching that. i reread my writes a few times to look for them, but i missed a few on this one. lol

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 8/26/2008 3:05:15 AM
Oops sorry about the double.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 8/26/2008 3:04:43 AM
Touching. I feel the joy and the pain you express. I liked how you put them both in here. Friendly advice: Try to catch your typos. Details...Instead... You're not there are 3 that I see. Still good work here.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 8/26/2008 3:04:33 AM
Touching. I feel the joy and the pain you express. I liked how you put them both in here. Friendly advice: Try to catch your typos. Details...Instead... You're not there are 3 that I see. Still good work here.

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Laid back young woman who's very mature with a poetic soul
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