Word Paintings(Revised 7/10)
Word paintings can describe a bloom:
Whose yellow bud is candle flame,
In musings of a treasured room:
Where firelight memories are framed.

They come to me in ready lines,
Or jumbled and chaotical:
These pictures to be set in rhyme,
By paintbrush waxed poetical.

Comments:
 
Rinskinski   Rinskinski wrote
on 9/2/2009 4:07:55 AM
Well done! I love the ABAB CDCD form. It's very tricky to achieve but you've mastered it! In addition, rhyming "chaotical" with "poetical" was VERY clever! :D

Kartel   Kartel wrote
on 9/1/2009 12:40:53 PM
yes it is hard to write short poems , u killed , off the hook

Trenchtownrock   Trenchtownrock wrote
on 9/1/2009 9:13:51 AM
A wonderfully done piece of work my friend..love how you closed with this piece..good work.

Arif   Arif wrote
on 8/31/2009 4:17:38 PM
wonderful descriptions and loved the ending...[:)]

MorlockKeeper   MorlockKeeper wrote
on 8/18/2009 3:01:01 AM
Good poem!

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Michele
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"...a poem a day, keeps the shrink away!"

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"Word Paintings" will be "Ink Melodies", Volume 2. Thanks for previous comments. I hope this revision sticks.
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