Feeling Of Regret

Deep inside

Crushed and burned

Feeling the regret

Wish to take to take it back

All the pain and hurt I caused you

 

A dark stormy cloud

Lingering over my head

Rain pouring on my heart

All the colors faded

Everything in black and grey

 

The light in my eyes...

Disappears

My Heart...Taken

Crushed and Burned

Watching as the beat

Slowly began to fade

To nothingness...


Comments:
 
tjwell01   tjwell01 wrote
on 4/25/2011 9:43:32 AM
No need for elipsis, and it couldn't hurt to be a little less melodramatic. Don't try so hard. Otherwise, good work.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 4/18/2011 6:01:45 AM
Nice work here. You express your emotion well and then the end result of your feelings add to the despair. I like how you did the second verse. Imaginative!

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Feelings of Regret I had last year
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Losing someone that you know who was a good person and you ended up doing something stupid and regretting that decision.
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