My Ideal Girlfriend

I am a young black man
Looking for the perfect girlfriend
And not just anybody will do
They got to have a heart
And stay true
I envision my girl to have long blond hair
And beautiful blue eyes
With A very sexy body
And about five foot five
She has to be secure and understanding
Not controlling or demanding
She has to be loving and caring
And not constantly flirting or cheating
I want my girl to respect me for who I am
And to realize that the clothes don't make the man
There is more to life than diamonds and fancy cars
My love will last for an eternity
And that's something that money can't buy
So if she can't see that
Then I am obviously not the right guy
She has to be there for me
When I am down
To let me know
That she will always be around
She has to know What she wants in life
And she has to be faithful
And stay by my side
She has to know
How to have fun
Without taking her clothes off
And trying to make me cum
She has to be cool, calm, and collected
If she wants to be in my selection
Now I see that my journey
Has only just begun
For me to find
That special one

By Glenn McCrary

© 2008 Glenn McCrary (All rights reserved)

Comments:
 
StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 5/11/2009 3:46:32 AM
I like the message here. And I agree with BlueIris too at the same time. We all know that to find the right person for us is truly the proverbial "needle in the haystack". Best wishes with your search, my friend!

BlueIris   BlueIris wrote
on 5/8/2009 11:15:04 AM
Sorry. The last comment was supposed to be on a different poem. My computer is having issues with placing comments in the wrong place, when I have multiple tabs up.

BlueIris   BlueIris wrote
on 5/8/2009 11:13:09 AM
This flows beautifully, especially due to all the alliteration and the mirror image of the beginning and the end. As a mother, I can really relate to the image of the "feverish child's nightless wail." Thank you for sharing.

BlueIris   BlueIris wrote
on 5/8/2009 11:08:04 AM
She can't love you at all for your money or clothes, but you insist she have a "very sexy body," "blonde hair," and "blue eyes"? Although we tend to be attracted to certain kinds of people, wanting someone for their looks could be considered materialistic, as well. I think your poem would sound sweeter, like I think you mean it to, if you ommit the word "blonde," when referring to her hair, and instead of specifically saying, "blue eyes," you could say "deep eyes" or "bright eyes." Instead of calling her body sexy, you could refer to the woman or her attitude as sexy.

Del_Horton   Del_Horton wrote
on 5/8/2009 11:02:35 AM
I've enjoyed your poems. They seem to relate to your everyday life and reflex the mood that you're in.

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