Divided
Conscious dissection, tenebrous cerebration
                       Waited
    Bated breathe, intuitive hesitation

Lachrymose duct arid, eye white etched with 
            raging tributaries of red
                        Deluge
    Torrid tears, evaporating when shed

Halted hopes, disrupted desires, forfieted dreams
                        Spineless
Diaphanous membrane for not revealing the unseen

Once malleable heart now and ossified organ, two souls
                        Halfed
By foul betrayl-no longer wholly subsisting as one






Comments:
 
OneVoice   OneVoice wrote
on 11/2/2008 3:56:25 AM
Betrayal is a bitter pill that never 'swallows' well. Hindsight only rears its proverbial 'I told you so' head after tragedy. A broken and hardened heart will mend and soften once again when you find yourself in the smile of another’s eyes letting you know… ‘There is room for you here’. "Diaphanous membrane for not revealing the unseen "... stop beating yourself for not 'knowing' about the lie and 'holding on' to a hope that blinded you to the truth you didn’t really want to see - remember love (your love) covered a multitude of faults... you 'wanted' to believe - It's ok. As you re-evaluate your hopes, dreams and desires... ask yourself (knowing what you now know)... "Is this the one with whom I would want to continue my journey"? Count yourself blessed that you have been given an opportunity to discover yourself. As it is with many things… change is not always embraced with open arms and a willing heart, but change, none the less, is a transitional junction in the life of us all – it will provide to you a new opportunity for happiness. This write is very expressive and passionate. I respect the way you crafted this write – well done.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 10/25/2008 12:28:10 AM
I agree with Lindsay. I could feel the pain you expressed at the end. Very good!

lindsay   lindsay wrote
on 10/24/2008 11:47:50 AM
This is really good. Your words resonate. Each word seems meticulously chosen yet flows freely.

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