The Maze | Poetry | WritingRoom

RETURN HOME

JOIN NOW - IT'S FREE LOGIN | CONTACT| ABOUT

My Room

Members

Writings

Blogs

Activities

Blog

Writing How To

Experts

Authors

Publish

Writing Contests

Videos

Help

Recently Viewed: The Maze

The Maze

Left and right nowhere to turn,

I don't cry but my eyes burn.

The tears held back but not for long.

I'm where I started where I've already gone.

My world is lost in a foggy haze

How do I leave this endless maze?

It’s the labyrinth that just won't end.

No one has the answer family or friend,

Believe me they've tried and believe me I see

But they aren't the answer I need them to be.

Am I doomed to spend the rest of my days

Going around in this circular maze?

I'm where I have been, where I just started,

I'm back at "Go" where I just departed.

I fought so long to get back where I am?

I'm getting to the point I just don't give a damn!

Do you have any idea how much hell I could raise?

I'm sick of being in this tedious maze!

I'm not ungrateful. I just can't find a word.

It's something familiar that I've never heard,

Something that yells, hollers, and screams,

Something only uttered once in my dreams,

Words that explain all my different ways,

Words that spell out the end to this maze.

A puzzle piece that I search all hours to find

Searching for quiet and peace that is mine.

It exists! I know its there!

It isn't some thought made up of air!

I know its somewhere and I hope it stays.

It’s my only way out of this troubled maze.

As I search and run ahead

I find my footprints again instead.

Back to the beginning no turn left or right

My tears are falling; I'm losing the fight.

My world is lost in a foggy haze

How do I leave this endless maze?

Comments:

		Warriorprincess55 wrote on 12/17/2008 10:44:43 PM
		I'd just like to say that I find this poem to be an excellent write that kept me from start to finish. I like reading what is written from the heart and written as well as you write. Like Shakatoah, I haven't studied the form, so to speak, but I know what I like, and I enjoyed reading this. It is powerful and filled with truths that I totally relate to! Thanks for sharing it with us.

		Sojourner wrote on 12/10/2008 9:55:28 PM
		I read this poem and I can honestly say that this is one of the few poems that have greatly impacted me! I think this is a great masterpiece and I would honestly buy it if it were for sale. The only comment that I have that is constructive is that your poem was hindered somewhat by grammer, other than that, it was perfect.

		Trenchtownrock wrote on 12/8/2008 7:02:02 AM
		This is such a heartfelt write. I was into the piece especailly after reading about the inspiration. Great voice.

		StarPoet wrote on 12/8/2008 12:37:24 AM
		I like how you tell this, for I know that disorder is very frustrating. I think that your friend is lucky to have you as a friend for you care enough about him to write this. And I do remember that movie "Labyrinth" for David Bowie was in it.

		shakatoah wrote on 12/5/2008 8:22:19 AM
		You manage to evoke the frustration and futility of this disorder so well. I really appreciate the way you not only talk about the maze...but also talk us around it...leading us constantly back to that heartbreaking point. I'm not a natural poet myself...and haven't studied the form so can't really comment on technical aspects. But it does indeed work...and there is much insight and feeling there. I really get a kick out of reading something in which I can feel a little of the writer's heart...you've done that for me. Thank you...:)

G_Money
Poetry
Other

View My Profile

View My Writings

View My Photos

Report Abuse

Read and Write Comments

You must log in to rate.

Rating: 9.0/10

Synopsis

I wrote this for a friend to give a voice to the painful struggle of bipolar depression. Sometimes it helps to know that someone "gets it".

A Word from the Writer

Have you ever seen the movie "Labyrinth"? The girl runs around and around and ends up right back where she started no matter how fast or hard she runs. That's what I was thinking about as I was writing. Comments and suggestions are appreciated :)