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Lonely
losing hope
she holds her head up
she tries to cope
she hides her tears
behinds closed doors
she fights each battle
yet she's losing the war
patience they tell her
is the way
but smiling gets harder
every day
Darkness crowds
she feels worthless
her heart is breaking
her nights are sleepless
as months pass
she hopes the journey
will end
and the prize received
will her broken heart
mend.

Written: 1-17-08

Comments:
 
prettyflower1_73   prettyflower1_73 wrote
on 6/17/2008 9:55:21 AM
I like it, it is so short and sweet and to the point, it is a very nice read!

Michele   Michele wrote
on 6/17/2008 12:10:54 AM
Next time a phrase or two sticks in your mind, start writing and the rest will come.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 6/16/2008 11:00:25 PM
Your first poem on here is very good! The desperation and the frustration you really express well. Don't make your first here your last!

penname   penname wrote
on 6/16/2008 7:52:00 PM
great poem each line infused with emotion how about a remake- one with hope and rejuvenation.

danicpa68   danicpa68 wrote
on 6/16/2008 5:49:17 PM
beautifully written and it speaks to the broken hearted souls.

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Synopsis
This is the last poem I wrote and sadly I wrote it back in January.
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