"Falling Apart."
  

FALLING   APART ©

 

It breaks my heart to see the place we’re in, from where we came

Seems like just the other day I said ‘Hey cutie, what’s your name?’

We never used to argue, tell me, what happened to us?

Now we can’t have a conversation, lately all you do is cuss

Used to see each other all the time, I even saw you in my dreams

Now I wake up and I see your face, and I want to fucking scream,

I was free to come to you with my problems, my cares and my concerns

Now you’re like “so what mother-fucker I’ve got problems of my own”

The other day I watched you sleeping and a tear came to my eye

Because here we are falling apart and I still don’t know why

Some say it starts with the little things that we don’t often see

Like forgetting to say ‘I love you’ or, ‘how was your day, honey?’

I used to bring you flowers all the time, maybe I should go back there

And do the little things I did before to show you that I care,

Maybe you should and caress me more, the way you used to do

And tell me every now and then, just how much I mean to you

I know that we can make this work; I feel it in my heart

Let’s work on falling back in love, so we won’t fall apart.

                                                  M. Fergus


Comments:
 
Angeleyez   Angeleyez wrote
on 7/9/2008 10:45:52 PM
This addresses a problem that alot of ppl have in there relationships well done

Warriorprincess55   Warriorprincess55 wrote
on 5/22/2008 10:07:05 PM
Hey, life is such and such is life! We do what we do in our lives as we live our lives and then and always after all we do in this life, we die! We do the best we can while we are here and deal with life always, one way or the other! You wrote a beautiful poem! Good for you!

Synthetasthete   Synthetasthete wrote
on 5/22/2008 12:20:03 AM
Ouch! this doesn't bring back memories or anything! It is a good one, though. I am suprised it was written for someone else.

penname   penname wrote
on 5/21/2008 2:11:44 AM
I really like this. Extremely meaninful. I love the ending - so somber yet hopeful. I would lose the boldface on the last two words- the poem is wonderful on its own and the ending leaves a very touching moment at the end. Thanks for sharing this poem.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 5/20/2008 11:34:14 PM
Very nice. This is a poem that we all should think about when in a relationship. Even if it is going good, this poem would still be food for thought, for things change.

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Synopsis
This piece was designed to assist a friend of mine who was going through a rough time in his relationship. I created it using his exact sentiments. He actually presented the piece to his, then girlfriend, and long story short, they've been together ever since. I am in no way taking credit for solving his relationship issues because they faced many a rocky road after that. He did thank me however for writing it as honestly and as gritty as I did. He later related to me that they both shared a good laugh over it. I guess laughing is a whole lot better than fighting. Go figure !
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