Young Love

Young Love

When I look deep inside myself, I ask why we did those things to bring us to the point of ending one’s life. A little problem turned into drama that made the world crumble beneath us. A little sight of honesty got me nowhere, you completely jumped to conclusions that my mind was in a state of hate. Once again, you were wrong, now alone in this empty house the future is looking dim. I had no intensions of hurting you the way I did. You were the one and true person I loved. To keep things inside of me, and not expressing them to you would have made things worse. However, you were too immature to see such visible emotion.  Stuck in your own world of selfishness, you couldn’t even lift a finger to try to talk to me. I know you have been hurt before but I am just like you… crying… and suffering from the pain of losing a great friend and life partner. I have never felt as strong towards the opposite sex as I did for you. Everything about you made my life a better, your friends, your smile, your parents and even your best friends. Although I tried my heart out I still can’t find another love, never will things be the same. You ripped the heart of me and threw it away. All I can do is wonder if I did the right thing. Wow how a couple of words of honesty can fuck you over( excuse my language)… and how the right words and bring everything back together. I’m a shy guy what can I say.

 

 

I wrote this when I was 14 any comments sorry about the bad language I was very upset!

 

Thanks for reading

 

Comments welcome!!!

 

Brandon Kincheloe

Brandon Kincheloe 2008©


Comments:
 
StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 9/24/2009 2:16:06 AM
I also wrote one titled "Young In Love" which is on here. Great minds think alike.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 9/24/2009 2:15:03 AM
You wrote what you felt at that time and that is what makes it so impactful. This is true, raw emotion. Good for you!

Sojourner   Sojourner wrote
on 4/11/2009 8:31:20 PM
Wow, this piece was amazing, it's kind of sad, but the writing itself is awesome. I disagree with Ashes of Lilith in regards to the curse word you used. I think that you can go to Thesaurus.com and find many more effective words, and allow everyone to enjoy your work instead of a smaller group that can handle the curse words. Awesome piece dude!!!

AshesofLilith   AshesofLilith wrote
on 12/18/2008 9:32:47 PM
A poem or story is a reflection of one's self- don't apologize for saying 'fuck'... It is the word you wished to use to describe what you were feeling, there is nothing wrong with that, bro. Love you man you're metal as fuck!

Brandon_the_Decaying_Ocean   Brandon_the_Decaying_Ocean wrote
on 12/17/2008 4:13:48 AM
I was pissed ha ha

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Hi everyone I'm Brandon I love to read/write may it be lyics or poems! I'm a current vocalist in a progressive metal band and love inspiring writings! The kinds of writings that help this world as we know it go round! Any comments would be nice! Don't be shy! thanks

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