Colors
 
colors of the rainbow
all of those reds, the greens and the bluez
all things telling me what I need to know
killing me with life's little abuse
flowers pushing up from the ground
they're trying to find the sun
murders committed without a sound
and another day is done
some need that water to grow
and others need life's blood
some needs met, some left unknown
some left to dry, and some drown in a flood
somewhere in between
madness and undefined insanity
somewhere between kindness and mean
like a forgotten ring left on the vanity

Comments:
 
Bluez   Bluez wrote
on 6/12/2009 7:58:01 AM
Thank you so very much, I have looked at all the "views" of this one and "no comments" left behind and wondered why not? I think that last line is pretty cool too, leaves you with a definate image to think about, but I never realized that until you pointed it out. (I don't review my own work beyond checking the flow and looking for typos) but I think that "wish I had written that" comment REALLY makes me happy, what a compliment that is! I say it again: your a good friend to have!

Starlingpoet   Starlingpoet wrote
on 6/12/2009 3:19:37 AM
The last line of your poem really jumped out at me -all I can say is I wish I had wrote it first!! I will remember that image for a long time! Really vivid images in this poem -great writing.

Bluez
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