Intolerance
I matter more because I am number one.
You must look after yourself these days.
This 'Brotherhood of man' is but a con,
And charity is just another faze
In the illusioned mind of some
Who have not learned: what does not pay
Is better off not done.

If I am so inclined, I may
Put another infront of me
But only so I can obey
An urge to feel superior
And justified in my disdain
Of those I elbow to get by
And those I curse: who make me sigh.

I look around and understand
My place within this world:
A diamond in the grains of sand;
My tolerance for others curled
And wrapped inside my own belief
That so many others should
Not be allowed - O, such relief
If all shared my thoughts and principles,
My standards, codes and practice -
Makes perfect, perfect sense to me
And would offer perfect bliss.

Comments:
 
Roxanna   Roxanna wrote
on 8/5/2010 8:31:35 AM
loved this piece, really enjoy reading your work! Perhaps one day 6th Form classes will be studying your work =)

AshesofLilith   AshesofLilith wrote
on 6/29/2009 8:38:31 PM
I absolutely agree with Moqui, this poem is very well written, I grasped the sarcasm and irony right off the bat and felt humored by it. I agree with your observations, especially since I have fallen prey to such feelings many times before (to my embarrassment...). Lovely writing.

StarPoet   StarPoet wrote
on 5/11/2009 4:01:10 AM
I like the message this poem says to humanity. There is too much "I" in the world, especially the so called civilized world and not enough "us". This is the age of "Me-ism" and you tell it very well.

WandaLeaBrayton   WandaLeaBrayton wrote
on 5/7/2009 10:49:49 AM
I absolutely detested the behavior that was ragingly rampant in the 1980's in the U.S. ~ the so~called "Me Generation"...actually, I think it's still a prevalent thought among most people under 40 or 50. What complete arrogance, what a lack of civility, let alone humility & a sense of humanity. Too many people are far too self~centered...why, I don't know. It's not that they're very fascinating or anything...except, perhaps, in their own minds. lol As for your spelling of "faze", it IS a correct spelling of a well~known slang phrase, indicating something that is a popular thing now, but won't necessarily remain so...Much like Andy Warhol's assertion that we would all attain fame for 15 minutes. Personally, I'm not interested. I AM a reclusive writer, after all. Fame would merely be an unwelcome interruption to an otherwise lovely day. *grins* I have long felt that "Mankind" could use lessons in kindness, anyway. Irony, sardonic wit & subtle inferences are often lost on those who are most concerned with "appearances". Myself, I've always been far more about content than form. A well~penned piece which needs no alterations or assertions. As I always used to say, "If I could explain it, I wouldn't have to paint it." Leave it to the scholars to interpret, many years from now. It stands firmly on its own feet, Poet. ~ Wanda

Moqui_Takoda   Moqui_Takoda wrote
on 5/5/2009 4:36:25 AM
I couldn't disagree more with frederick. I find the poem well written. It is a fine example of satire and very effective. Your use of the word 'faze' is perfect. Excellent work. I will catch up on your writing and your new author pic is beautiful. No need to dumb down a poem by using bold so that the reader will get your slant on the poem ... some people understand poetry and some don't. Nice work.

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