symbelmine   symbelmine wrote
on 8/11/2009 8:01:57 PM
Hi lost one, hey i have one of your stories, back from the box of old stuff ji ji ji, its called let me tell you about a dream i had or something like that if you want it ill email it to you.

shakatoah   shakatoah wrote
on 2/24/2009 12:27:00 AM
Hi there and thanks so much for your comments on my story 'Pale Sun Over Sarajevo'. When I went back to have a look, I noticed half the story was missing!!! Sometimes I have awful trouble with the formatting in the Writing Room and it seems the last part of my story just disappeared. If you'd like to know how it finishes, I've added the missing part now. The language I used for the soldier was very close to that used by the guys in the interview - I guess they would have vetted their speech for the camera. They're also Serbian/Bosnian (some were even German) and were speaking in English so that made a difference also. Like you, I've known blokes in the services and you're right about the swearing...at least every other word starts with F or B or S...or worse...:) You're probably right about the realism factor but I think for now, I'll leave it as it stands, hoping that it works just the same. I do appreciate your suggestion though because I honestly hadn't thought of it...and it's an excellent point. Cheers and warm thoughts.

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