BarefootPoet   BarefootPoet wrote
on 2/26/2015 7:47:56 AM
Hi, I just read your poem, Lock Without a Key. It is well crafted. Could I make a suggestion to make it more powerful, give it more of a punch? If you remove the repeating words and stick to the meaty words (so to speak), they will show more of the emotions you are portraying. For example: I'm no longer whole Neither is he Locked out by pain Cannot find the key (Sadly wasn't a repeating word in this stanza but your entire poem speaks of sadness) I enjoyed reading your work this morning and hope to see more.

SynystersWife   SynystersWife wrote
on 1/25/2015 11:24:10 PM
Hello there, I saw that you liked a lot of the same things I did and I was hoping we could be friend! I love your works, they are very good. Message me whenever you like, em, also hit me up on Wattpad.com if you ever decide to join it. Personally speaking, Wattpad is a little more fun and up beat than this site. Anyway, I wish you the best of luck on your writing. Love Avenged as well, Syn is a perfect babe! :)

jesusfreak786   jesusfreak786 wrote
on 1/11/2015 4:47:05 PM
Hey! I like the writings you've posted =) And you're very beautiful =) You should post more!

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